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    Wait, the prize is a bunch of glowing, floating gems? Unless they are a cross between Control Crystals and Zero Point Modules (and thus will provide (and coordinates (quantum, temporal, etc)) the energy to send you back to your own universe), I don't think we're ready to open that can of worms.
    Also, I came up with an idea for the almost-final-chapter of your Fan-Fiction. Note that this is just a concept, so it isn't very well polished.

    Arch is in first-place, on his way to the finish line. However, he takes a hit to the rear of his craft, severly damaging it. The computer starts diverting all power to structural integrity, putting the engines offline, and thus bringing Arch to a screeching halt. Jet, in the Icarus, passes Arch. However, right before he reaches the finish line, he releases the throttle, slams hard on both airbrakes, and starts turning his ship around. Then, as he flies towards Arch and fishtails around his craft, he locks onto Arch with a Nosferatu (Leech) module, but inverts the polarity (thus, the Nosferatu is draining Jet's shields and transferring it to Arch's craft). Then, he kicks the Hyperthrust, propelling both ships forward at high speed.

    Arch engages the rear view camera, trying to figure out why he is moving forward so quickly, then he sees Jet's craft behind him, falling apart. Once Arch is back at full shield energy, the computer resumes providing the engines with power.
    Then a missile hits Jet from behind, causing his craft to explode (wether he was able to eject is unknown), and the shockwave of the explosion propels Arch's craft with even greater momentum, allowing him to cross the finish line (in first place).

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    Cool idea, eh?
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    Yeah, Arch does win, but he hails Jet on a secure frequency, waits, and hears him. Which reminds me, Arch thinks there are Chaos Emeralds up for grabs, but they're actually mock-ups, they just don't know it yet. But, he can get them home, he just needs a new fission battery for his singularity generator. But they were expensive, it would take the prize money from both Championships to compensate. Later on though, he'll realize they haven't made him just a better pilot, they made him a better person. He's playing the Chaos Emerald card to get that bat-girl to side with him along Knux. He needs a fan base, it's what propels him to do what he must.

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    *very far in the past (or rather, the present day), Daniel Jackson (see - Stargate franchise) somehow comes across the real chaos emeralds while checking out a planet they gated to*
    Daniel: Hmm... I wonder what these do...
    *puts them inside slots around the DHD*
    *gate starts dialing itself, and opens a wormhole to another universe*
    Random Canadian *on other side*: Dafuq?

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    By "them", I was referring to Knux and Rouge, not the mock emeralds. Arch like most of his species rarely resorts to trickery and bending the truth. This policy does have exceptions, desperation is the best motivation. As for why fission batteries are worth a winning season, is thanks to a tax on nuclear and radioactive materials that he needs to make one. The tax was imposed in a fit to reduce the nuclear arsenal the world over. They still produce fission batteries, but the tax makes it nearly impossible to buy one, unless you are rich, part of a research team, or a heroic icon. The next chapter is on the way.

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    Screw Fission Batteries, get a ZPM (short for Zero Point Module, but let's just call it a ZedPM).

    In my imagination, the Chaos Emeralds are basically (as mentioned above) hybrids between Control Crystals (providing spatial, temporal, and trans-universe coordinates), and ZPMs (providing the necessary power to create a stable artifical wormhole to another universe, place, and time simultaenously. And since a stargate address has seven symbols (eight if dialing to another galaxy), I guess it all works out in the end.

    Let me pull an Adrian Monk on you... Here's what happened;
    Not too long before the F7200, Pierre Belmondo discovered seven ancient artifacts in an archaelogical dig with a technological level far surpassing what mankind could be theoretically capable of even after a few centuries of development. He decided to share them with each of the seven teams (there were only seven at the time) for the benefit of mankind (using the information stored in the artifacts to develop new technology, and using the energy produced by them to provide free energy to all of mankind (Zero Point Energy is the equivalent of billions upon billions of Petawatts, which of course is more than enough to satisfy the world's energy needs for a few millennia). Some of [REDACTED]'s henchmen were stationed at a base on Makana Island, and they had heard rumors of seven artifacts being discovered. Goteki was founded to undermine the league, and to get ahold of said artifacts (you have probablyt figured out by now that these artifacts are the 'Chaos Emeralds"). However, Qirex and Overtel were still trying to gain their own power, so they bombed Goteki's headquarters to keep them from suceeding. Next, Overtel sent spies to take down AG Systems from the inside via espionage.

    That was another rough concept, but it fits in with your WipEout/Sonic crossover well without making it too corny.
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    Or we could do an alternate version of my story, which is probably going to be WAY better (and less confusing).

    [REDACTED] was in a high position at Overtel, and AG SYstems didn't provide Qirex with one (knowing that they would only abuse it). Because of that, he starts trying to sabotage all of the teams, and thus Goteki is established to eliminate Qirex. However, their plan sort-of backfired, and Qirex bombed them instead.
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    Well, Zig Zag and Sabrina (refer to Sabrina Online for more on the characters and story) are also from the same universe Arch resides in. In a scrapped story of mine "Operation Schwartz-geist", when the Brotherhood of Nod collapsed, Sabrina gave Arch his only working prototype, of a pocket singularity generator. If Sabrina survives her encounter with the same rat that her boyfriend Richard Conrad sprayed at, she and Zig Zag will get a first glimpse of the future of racing.

    About [REDACTED], he needs a name, we can't use Spartace since he's piloting for Qirex. I want to use the Russian derivative of Arch McShane, Adrik Mikhailov. And this might be why FEISAR is in danger of losing it's label:

    Adrik Mikhailov, an administrator for the Overtel corporation, noticed that FEISAR relocation to Berlin, Germany, weeks before the F7200 inaugural season, was also the same location where Overtel would plot the next move for when Belmondo finally kicks the bucket. To keep FEISAR distracted, they decided to exploit a marketing fault that FEISAR was hiding. Adrik discovered that FEISAR was but a sponsor short of meeting the minimum sponsorship limit. That's when Overtel blackmailed Qirex into reporting FEISAR to the commission, in exchange for keeping the corrupt funding to themselves. Vincent De Blanc was then issued an ultimatum, find a sponsor before the end of the season or sell the team. With FEISAR in a state of panic, their search for a sponsor went on long enough for Overtel to conduct their meeting. Members of the Belmondo Foundation, including Pierre himself discovered that Qirex plans to wager their Chaos Emerald in the Nostalgia Cup. Overtel is using this as a front, to collect the other Emeralds from their six enemies. Belmondo, then decided to persuade Makana to race in the F7200 to undermine the league, exposing Overtel's corruption in the process. But, with the arrival of Arch and company, he decides to use FEISAR's rising star, as a backup plan. For Qirex is bound to discover Goteki 45's true origins and will level Makana to keep their mouths shut. Thus, in anticipation, Pierre decides to make Arch his secret pilot, though his friends will find out eventually. So, Belmondo tells Arch's friends to help Arch, when he needs it, and make sure he doesn't give away the operation to the opposing teams, especially Goteki 45 and Qirex.

    Of course, that's what the next chapter will contain.
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    I kept calling him '[REDACTED]' because it is easier than saying '[REMOVED FOR SECURITY REASONS]'. We don't want to spoil it for anyone, afterall.
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    Well, actually, you kinda' put a lot of sense into the story. Ok, here's what I posted on Sunday on FA.
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    Noah's Ark: Total Wip3out

    Chapter 5: Simulated Training 3

    Arch wakes up the next day to find Mithane upgrading the craft for the Venom Speed Class Evaluations.

    Mithane: Morning, Anderetti. About time you woke up. By the way, we took account of your invite to Knux and Rouge, and agreed to make accomodations for them.

    Rouge: Look what the the cat dragged in?

    Knuckles: Sorry but where did they come from?

    Arch: If you are referring to my friends and I, we're from the past, that's all I can tell you.

    Noah: Remind me again, what do you want me to do?

    Arch: You're the Team's manager, and Aurora's your co-manager. Your goal is to help me get to the Phantom Class Series of the F7200 League. But remember, I have to win all of the simulations to prove to the committee that I'm ready for the big time.

    Noah: I'll do my best, sir.

    Kentaro: I think you'll like the repairs made to your race, Arch.

    Arch: Hmm, doesn't look any different. Is it faster, than normal.

    Kentaro: Can you handle the higher speed?

    Pierre Belmondo: Oui, but in evaluation, risks makes data. . . sketchy, so to say.

    Arch: Pierre Belmondo! The divine father of AG racing!

    Pierre: I wouldn't say "divine", but it's good enough for me. Bonjour, monsieurs Kentaro, Noah, madamemoiselle Aurora. I see FEISAR has a rising star, this season.

    Rouge: Hey, Anderetti! Don't leave us hanging.

    Arch: I'm sorry, where are my manners. Welcome to the year 2116, the year of the first F7200 AG Racing League Season. You know me from the temporal-gram, I sent you. I'm Archibald McShane, lead pilot for Federal European Industrial Science and Research, better known as FEISAR. You two have been selected to help my team and I get back home. The F7200 has a gold medal prize for the seven out of eight races, a Chaos Emerald for the winner of the first seven races of the Nostalgia Cup.

    But to get to the Cup, I have to first save FEISAR from foreclosure, by racing in the Phantom Class Championship. However, I must win gold in all six simulations, the committee is throwing at me, to race in the Phantom Class.

    And, no Rouge, we need the Emeralds to use Chaos Control to get back home. Knux, as long as you two work together for the common goal, I have set, I don't want any friction between the both of you. Or so help me, I will challenge you to an Elimination Race to the death, of your AG craft.

    Pierre Belmondo: Sacre Bleu, why must you be so violent?

    Arch: Because these two, have always had a strained relationship. Rouge wants the Master Emerald for herself, but Knux is so hot-headed, unlike his dad Locke! He is the guardian of the Master Emerald.

    Pierre: I see, is the Master Emerald here?

    Arch: No, so there's no reason for you two to argue.

    Rouge: Couldn't Knuckles help me steal to help everyone after all I am skilled in stealing things?

    Arch: Here's the problem, Rouge, I've already made a commitment to earn them the right way, by racing to the top. Tell you what, promise to stay and cheer me on without resorting to gran theft mineral, I will give you 1,000,000 rings and, *takes out a 5 kilo egg-shaped diamond* this Diamond Egg I fabricated from volcanic ash on Vostok Island. Knux, how about an upgrade for your shovel claws? You might as well, before the judges show up in about *looks at watch* 30 seconds.

    Knuckles: Sure, BTW if this is the past how do have a upgrade for me?

    Rouge: Also, if you don't win then can I steal it?

    Arch: Sure, Rouge, but I highly doubt I will lose. And Knux, it's my friends and I that came from the past, I seem to have misinterpreted your frame of reference. The shovel claws can be remodeled, with the strongest metal in the world, Tungsten.

    Pierre: Excuse moi, we are ready, Archibald.

    Arch: And so, it begins, again!



    After the race, Arch was lucky for his craft to survive. With a small amount of shield energy left, he pulled through and won the gold, by the skin of his teeth.

    Kentaro: Gold huh? Not bad. But be careful with those turns.

    Arch: I'm still learning pitch control, and I can't tell what direction works with what scenario.

    Kentaro: Well, you should be careful not to take too much damage. We'd hate for you to crash during an actual race.

    Rouge: He won now then when will he give me the 1,000,000 rings and 5 kilo egg-shaped diamond?

    Knuckles: And what does he want me to do with the upgrade?

    Rouge: Who knows I just want that 5 kilo egg-shaped diamond. *her eyes turn to hearts just thinking about the place she is going to put it*

    Arch: Patience, once I win the Phantom Class Series, and the Nostalgia Cup, which should take about 6 months tops, your fortunes will be fulfilled. I know it's long, and I want to get home too, but Mr. Belmondo knows you're conspiring, Rouge. And, Knux, the upgrade will be able to tear through Iridium-encrusted meteors, and you'll dig farther into the planet, like never before.

    Knuckles: Well then are we in mine and Rouge's time line or yours?

    Rouge: And How does Mr. Belmondo know I'm conspiring?

    Pierre: Because, he told me about you, Rouge, during the race.

    Arch: And, the answer is neither, Knux, this is the future to all of us. Of course, anything is possible in the multiverse.

    Rouge: Hmm, if I go to the bank would I be able to take money out?

    Arch: Only if it's a withdrawal, besides it's a digital form of currency they have around the world, virtually come back, my next race starts at 1:00 PM.impossible to steal unless you are a hacker.

    Rouge: Are you? Because, I hack. Anyway, I want to get a drink.

    Knuckles: A pricey drink?

    Rouge: Yeah, Maze. Well, when I get back, I'll leave some money in there, so the money will increase.

    Arch: Go right ahead, be sure to come back, my next race starts at 1:00 PM.
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    Once Sabrina and Zig Zag are introduced, Mr. Belmondo will tell FEISAR of his plan involving Arch, and he will tell them of the Emeralds.
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    I think 'Credits' would be a better currency than 'Rings'.
    Oh, did you close your Twitter Account or something?

    Okay, I had an idea: While the Fan-Fiction is pretty good right ow, it needs a few updates. For example, it needs a little more attention to detail (like in a Fantasy or Science Fiction novel), and it also needes to change point of view every now and then to keep it from being monotonous.
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