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    Noah's Ark: Total Wip3out

    Based on the racing game by Psygnosis

    Story by Nicholas Manuel

    Characters by their respective owners.

    Chapter 1: Good Sequence, Bad Timing.

    Miyamoto Dojo Labs is in for a real treat, today. Archibald McShane was about to bring his team into the future, more like an alternate future.

    Arch: Ladies and gentlefurs, what you are about to see is the future of racing.

    He inputs a sequence and pulls the lever to take them into the year 2048. However, Rayden, the mischevious Norn was about to send them further into the future.

    Arch: RAYDEN, DON'T!

    Rayden presses buttons randomly, and overloads the console.

    Rayden: Oops, my bad. Oh well, a team is in need of your help anyway. Have fun at the F7200!

    Arch: Wait, what tea--?!

    Before his question was finished, Arch and company were pulled into the singularity prior to collapsing.

    They end up in an futuristic alley.

    Kentaro: Where are we?

    Arch: More like when, we're in the year 2116.

    Aurora: Oh No! What do we do?

    Arch: *Reading a billboard* "F7200 Preseason Race Today". I know let's watch a Anti-Gravity Race!

    The team agrees and pay for tickets and take their seats. For the race is about to begin.

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    Just because this is a Furry fanfiction, doesn't mean it's going to contain yiff. Ok, I'll admit, there will be only one chapter for a yiff scene, but I will not post it here, due to regulations within this forum. Instead, I will post a link to it, if any pilot's feeling brave enough to weather it, once I reach that point.

    More to the point, this story ties into the universe of one of my storytelling colleagues, who's fursona is under the moniker, Noah Taller, a wolf sorcerer. Remember when Fairclough, and Foxx said that the Overtel Corporation never made a real power grab until the F9000, years after Belmondo's death? Well, Noah's arch-nemesis, Lucien, gave the Overtel Corporation additional support to make Qirex-RD more dominant in the league than ever. Lucien even slated FEISAR for borderline foreclosure. This however, was all a front for Lucien biggest move, yet: to unite all the forces of evil in the known universes. While Arch and company boggle down over this trival matter, unaware of the true plot unfolding, Lucien will continue to make power grabs to recreate the multi-verse in his own twisted image! What will Lucien do next to keep our heroes distracted? Read more to find out!

    UPDATE: Lucien is actually in hibernation, However Spartace, Arch's brother is Racing for Qirex-RD to keep our heroes distracted while he continues his attempts to awaken Lucien. Will Arch win the seven Chaos Emeralds, and restore the balance of the WipEout Continuity? For all this and more, stay tuned!
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    Noah's Ark: Total Wip3out

    Chapter 2: Pre-season Picks

    Arch and company watch the race, only to see FEISAR in need of help.

    Speedlix: Huh? What's that sound?

    Arch: Nothing more than the humming of Anti-Gravity Engines. *sees Feisar* They, seem to have trouble with that Orange and Green team.

    Vincent De Blanc: Oui, we are een a bit of a slump. I should know, I own ze team.

    Arch: Archibald McShane.

    Vince: Vincent De Blanc, at your service. Our crafts are but ze slowest een speed. And your friends, les pas?

    Arch: Introduce yourselves, team!

    Speedlix: Hello, my name's Speedlix Strife its great to meet you, sir.

    Vince: Bonjour, Monsieur Speedlix. Are vous a technician, we need help getting our craft up to speed.

    Speedlix: Okay, what do I have to do?

    Vince: Your dragon friend agreed to race for us, zis season. You just need to keep ze craft maintained. We'll use our finances to get vous all up to speed.

    Arch: You sound very desperate, has your team won in the past.

    Vince: Sadly, no. And zis may be mon last year before the committee decides to pull ze plug.

    Speedlix: I'll give it try. *goes to the craft to maintain it*

    Kentaro: Um, I'm Kentaro Miyamoto.

    Vince: Bonjour, Monsieur Kentaro. Do you know anyone that can pilot an Anti-Gravity craft? I'm sure you'll do great as a trainer.

    Arch: I have a Starship Pilot's License, does that count for certification?

    Vince: Oui, I suppose. I'll see you all to our new Headquarters in Berlin. We may have hope for zis team.

    Arch: *to Ken* Perhaps his team is the one Rayden said we should help.

    Kentaro: Well, if it'll get us home, then sure.

    Danny: Danny Furrison, Mr. De Blanc.

    Vince: Bonjour, to you, Danny. Eh, what are you doing.

    Danny: Contemplating on the track. It's amazing how the designers make the courses so fluid, yet challenging.

    Vince: C'est magnifique! You, can be FEISAR's track analyst.

    Danny: Awesome!

    Aurora: Aurora Spencer.

    Vince: *kisses her paw* Madamemoiselle, ze pleasure is mine.

    Noah: No one kisses her paw but me!

    Vince: Mon deiu, zat's a powerful voice. Just what we need for a manager.

    Noah: You haven't assembled the team yet?

    Vince: We just finished moving to Berlin, what did you expect?

    Aurora: If he's manager, I'd like to be co-Manager.

    Vince: Very well, we all meet for Berlin, no need to buy train tickets, I got eet covered! *gives the team train tickets* I'll be ze one with the FEISAR sign.

    Arch: Ok, when's the next departure.

    Vince: Een one hour. Ze train station ees to ze north.

    The team runs off to catch the train, and they did.

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    Chapter 3: Simulated Training 1

    At FEISAR Headquarters in Berlin, Germany, Arch undergoes preliminary simulation to ensure his place in the F7200 Racing League.

    Speedlix: Okay, I'm ready to help you with anything, Arch. *holds on to his gear*

    Arch: Easy there, boyo, it's just a simulation. They only want to test my effectiveness on the track.

    Speedlix: Oh, so what's the point of this testing?

    Arch: The point is, I have to pilot for FEISAR. But, to race in the F7200, I have to earn validation from the committee.

    Speedlix: Wow, that's a pretty tough standard.

    Arch: Fortunately, I only have to pass two-thirds of simulations. The committee might give this team a finacial boost, if I pass all six simulations.

    Speedlix: That's great! You will pass for sure and I can't wait to see how you pilot. *smiling for excitement*

    Danny: I never did this before. Is it hard?

    Vince: Only Archibald ees qualified to pilot een ze simulator. The only thing you can do is radio him from the pits.

    Kentaro: A simulation huh? That's like a video game, right?

    Vince: Oui, I suppose. You have only verbal interaction with Arch, during ze sessions.

    Arch: *is in a FEISAR race suit* Ok, Let's start on course LS101/NP62.

    Vince: Oui! Bonne Chance!

    And the race is on!



    Danny: Be careful, Arch. If you're energy hits absolute zero, game over!

    Kentaro: Hmm. Not bad. A few bumps, but pretty good for your first run.

    Arch: Hey, I got vector gold, didn't I? And yes, I kinda turned too early on that last jump.

    Vince: Great strategy with ze pits, though.

    Arch: One down, five to go.

    Vince: Oui, but remember, if you win ze next session, you will be tested in ze Venom class from here on out. Win four in a row, you will be tested in ze Rapier Class, for ze last two. Win all six, This team get's a bonus!

    Danny: But... Those have ramps, don't they?

    Arch: What do you mean by that? The curves bank, the ramps have boost pads sometimes, and you have to use your weapon and countermeasure ordinances effectively.

    Danny: Sorry. Misunderstanding what you said from my part. ^^;

    Kentaro: Good luck, Arch.

    Speedlix: You can do it, Arch.

    Arch: Preparing to race, LS102/MG71.

    Aurora: I'm counting on you, my Space Captain!
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    Your Fan-Fiction is pretty cool.

    However, I think that in a universe with Anthropomorphic beings, they shouldn't refer to themsleves as 'furs' or 'furries' or whatever. For example, it is okay to replace 'Gentlefurs' with 'Gentlemen', because the words 'men' and 'women' are context sensitive.

    EDIT: Prototype Panic Race 2 of 6 @ Time Index [HH:MM:SS] 00:00:33
    Your character needs to practice his racing lines. Having a bad racing line is a good way to get yourself stuck in 8th place.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Amaroq Dricaldari View Post
    Your Fan-Fiction is pretty cool.

    However, I think that in a universe with Anthropomorphic beings, they shouldn't refer to themsleves as 'furs' or 'furries' or whatever. For example, it is okay to replace 'Gentlefurs' with 'Gentlemen', because the words 'men' and 'women' are context sensitive.

    EDIT: Prototype Panic Race 2 of 6 @ Time Index [HH:MM:SS] 00:00:33
    Your character needs to practice his racing lines. Having a bad racing line is a good way to get yourself stuck in 8th place.
    Well, that's just two of the things I need to deal with.

    1. Yes, Anthros thrive in the alternate reality, and you're right, I should worry less about their species.

    2. Yeah, I was hoping to get a clean shot with the rockets. But AG-Systems was much faster than my craft.

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    Speaking of which, what kind of animal is your character, anyway? Wolf, Fox? Or something more obscure, like a Bird? Also, are there humans in your universe?

    EDIT: You should use some of the forum's formatting tools to make certain parts of the text easier to distinguish from other parts of the text, and you should try to combine the current 'Playscript' style with some more focus on the details.
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    There's Humans in there, yes. And Arch is a Spore Alien, a cross between a Sasquatch and a dragon. Actually a Spore Alien can be a cross of any two or more species, extraterrestrial or non. Before you get riled up, bear in mind humans date only other humans. Same principle applies to Anthros.
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    Um... I wasn't implying that. But it does make sense.

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    The story's set in what year,2116? Who knows what kind of shizz humans might have come up with.

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    Perfected HD viewing platforms; Swiss army knives for engineers, race crew, and technicians; and insta-meals that require a cup of water and a special Nano-wave oven to make your favorite foods.

    At least, that's what my grand-kids would expect 104 years from now. Alcoholic beverages are still being made in 2116, but in moderate quantities, thanks to a semi-temperance bill that passed worldwide in an fit to keep the populace sober. Pilots are not allowed to drink until after a race, this bit of info is important to the plot of the second book. Anyway, the next chapter is coming your way: This time, I used word to tweak the formatting.
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    Chapter 4: Simulated Training 2

    Criticism from Arch's second race, leads to his change in strategy towards the Venom class trials.

    Speedlix: Amazing, this is going to be amazing.

    Kentaro: This won't be the same as the last time. Remember that.

    Arch: To be honest, I haven't piloted an Anti-Gravity Ship since my days in the UGSF Academy.

    Vince: Simulation begins een 10 seconds.

    Arch: Right!



    Danny: Those look like some sharp turns. Think you can manage?

    Arch: We have something for those, they are called "Airbrakes".

    After the race Arch feels great that he secured a gold medal position, but is discouraged by his lacking ability.

    Arch: Maybe that jump is trying to tell me something. Don't floor it, glide down. Perhaps that was what the Airbrakes were for. Aurora, did I soar, or was it just my heart using hyperthrust for you?

    Aurora: Oh you. *blushes at his witty remark*

    Kentaro: You still got a high ranking.\

    Arch: Doesn't matter, the next set of races are in the Venom Class, I have to race an additional lap from now on. And by the sound of things, the competition's gonna' get a little fiercer.

    Kentaro: We'll just have to get you ready for that then.

    Arch: We'll get to it tomorrow, right now we need some rest.

    Kentaro: Of course, good night, Arch.

    In Arch's sleeping chambers, he decides to call Mithane for help.

    In a bar, Mithane is watching Arch's performance recap on the flat screen.

    Mithane: now thats the kind of racing that will get him places...

    He takes another sip of his scotch, before paying and leaving. Suddenly, his his communicator rings mithane opens his palm and a holographic arch stands talking to him.

    Arch: Mithane, I'm surprised I can get some bars, here! More to the point, Feisar needs a chief engineer. Speedlix is doing great with maintenance, but he's inexeperienced at this level of tech. We need someone that knows how the ship is built inside and out. Someone like you. Can you come to Berlin at the next flight?

    Mithane: Oh? Well I guess so... I'll be there in an hour....

    Arch: I'll see you in the morning, Venom Class evaluations begin tomorrow.

    Mithane: Heh I'll have to take a look at your rig... Plus I hear they have some strong drink over there!

    Arch: You do that, LS103/AW72, isn't gonna' race itself.

    Before Arch goes to sleep, he watches some TV and finds out the prize for first place finishes in the first seven races of the Nostalgia Cup are the seven Chaos Emeralds. How they managed to make their way into the future, he assumes that they were introduced before 2116 through chaos control. He decides to invite two unlikely treasure hunters from the past. One is the guardian of a great treasure that the other wants for herself. They are Knuckles the Echinda and Rouge the Bat. They were in the middle of a squabble over this great treasure known as the Master Emerald, when Arch taps into the frequency of the Master Emerald, and begins to talk to them.

    Arch: Knuckles and Rouge, sorry to interrupt your little scrap, but I need you two for a special mission from the future.

    Rouge: The future? Just who do you think you are?

    Knuckles: And, how are you even reaching us from the Master Emerald?

    Arch: I use a Mobian artifact I came across while I was in your universe, two years ago from the present. It is a Chrono-crystal, a by-product from Sonicís adventure on the Little Planet. I use it to send messages to other Artifacts of Mobian Mythology. By the way, I am Archibald McShane and Iím trying to save an AG racing team from shutting down.

    Knuckles: AG?

    Rouge: As in, anti-gravity, hovercrafts?

    Arch: Something like that, Iíll let you in on it, tomorrow. Hereís your ticket in.

    Arch taps a miniature singularity generator with the crystal, and the warp device ends up on top of the Master Emerald. Knuckles grabs the device, and he and Rouge begin to examine it.

    Arch: Thatís a singularity generator, push that red button and it will take you beside the building Iím in, thatís the teamís headquarters. Donít worry about leaving the emerald unguarded, my sentry will cover for you.

    Arch then transports a sentry turret to the top of the Master Emerald.

    Rouge: Weíll see you in the morning, not that I will enjoy it.

    Arch: Settled, good night!

    Arch then deactivates the crystal and goes to sleep.

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    The reason why my story has Sonic Characters in it, is because this story takes place in an alternate Wipeout Reality, which is part of the multiversal complex. In theory, anything is possible. Knuckles and Rouge are not just known for their rather frictional relationship, but they are also aviation experts, of course Knux can only glide. Arch knew he needed help piloting AG craft, so he turns to the two Mobians, in hopes they can give him moral support and a few pointers. The next chapter is currently under development, so sub to this thread for more notes and chapters.

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